Tuesday 22 February 2011
Amsterdam trip concluded
Our trip to Amsterdam was better than last time and it was still expensive as it took 15 euros on the tram even for a short journey, but we ddn't spend as much money at the resturant we spent a lot but but we got a satisfying meal which was worth it we then walked on a dyke which was incredilbly windy thankfully we went into Marken a village on a spit of land which was very traditional to old Dutch houses but was not exactly the same as there were a few modern houses had been built but it was overall cosy and relaxing. The day afterwards we went to see some early Picasso that was oddly in the Van Gogh Muesum and saw a bit of Vincent Van Gogh we then walked back to the house, overall I think that I had a rather nice time.
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You might want to re-think the flow and punctuation of the sentences, so the meaning is clearer to the reader eg:
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Try reading yours again compared with the alternative. Do you see how my suggested changes might make it easier to understand?
It was insanely windy on that dyke, but at least now we can say we've really seen a Dutch dyke!
thanks for the tip, I will work on that
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